You switch tense in your first body paragraph. You need to avoid this.

So, in your second body paragraph, I suppose that you are saying that preferences in appearance are similar to those in the news, but intelligence is reversed?

I think that your organization could use a little “tweaking” in your body paragraphs to make your points more effective.

Your conclusion is also strong.

Ideas: 12 Organization: 11 Conventions: 6 29/30

When watching a news program, you begin more-than-subtle differences between the male and female anchors. (Read this sentence again. It doesn’t make sense.) The male broadcasters are normally well-spoken, intelligent, and old, but apparently (being) fit and handsome weren’t requirements of their position. Adversely, the females are almost always young, attractive and thin. It appears that viewers prefer to look at and admire the female’s beauty while listening to what the male has to say.

Sitcoms portray men and women in a similar way to news shows, while differing in some aspects as well. An example that I will use is The King of Queens, where, in my oppinions (spelling), he (who is “he”?) most certainly is NOT “fly” with the ladies. The main character, one Doug Heffernan, is a fat slob, whose obnoxious personality irks me to no end. This, apparently, is a re-occuring trait in most male sitcom actors. (Do you have some other examples?) His wife, Carrie, is obnoxious as well, however, her appearance is much less hard on the retinas. Now, don’t think that I believe that beauty can make up for a lack of personality, because I don’t. Nevertheless,